Setting Thesaurus Entry: School Bus

Sights

smudged windows, black rubber runner down the aisle, torn leather seats, signs (emergency exits, rules, stay behind the yellow line, bus driver’s name), red handles on emergency doors and windows, bus driver’s seat, big stick shift for opening/closing door…

Sounds

Laughter, talking, cel phones going off, backpacks thumping against the seat as kids walk down the rows, stomping, whistling, heckling, hooting, squealing, shouting, the bus driver yelling, paper crumpling, candy wrappers crinkling, slurping of pop, water…

Smells

Feet, sweat, fruity/minty gum, perfume/body spray, flavored lip balm, fresh air from open windows, mildew/mud (on cold, wet days)

Tastes

leftover lunch items (granola bars, fruit, sandwiches, chips, cookies, carrots, celery), pop, water, juice boxes, dry mouth from thirst, gum, mints, candy, chocolate bars

Touch

Hard seats, cold metal bus walls, unzipping a backpack, the pull on a backpack on the shoulder, lifting a heavy backpack off the seat, shoes sticking to a spill on the floor, kicking the seats, the rush of cool air on forehead from the window, Someone tapping you from…

Helpful hints:–The words you choose can convey atmosphere and mood.

Example 1: I walked down the isle, holding my breath tight inside me like it could somehow make me look smaller, like it could make up for the fact that my hips almost brushed the seats to each side. The bus was silent, dozens of gazes on me. I found an empty seat halfway down and gently settled into it, and for the first time in a long time hope welled up me that this school would be different. A smile started to pull at my lips, and then I heard a voice loudly proclaim, “Wow, she needs a wide load sticker!”…

–Similes and metaphors create strong imagery when used sparingly.

Example 1: (Metaphor) Miranda paused at the front of the bus, waiting to be noticed. The first shout of her name caused the others to look to the front, and soon hands poked the air, waving madly for her to come sit with them. Miranda shook her blond curls back and let her regal gaze drift over the crowd, a queen surveying her subjects, then chose a seat next to Brent, the most popular boy in school…

Think beyond what a character sees, and provide a sensory feast for readers

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5 Responses to Setting Thesaurus Entry: School Bus

  1. Angela says:

    Yay, thanks, guys!!

  2. C.R. Evers says:

    you nailed it again! :0)

  3. Scratchy Paw says:

    Super examples. Thanks.

  4. PJ Hoover says:

    What about the guy pinching my butt on the late bus (which was so crowded I had no room to sit).
    Ah, the memories 🙂

  5. Angela says:

    I love your details… you guys have created an awesome reference with this blog!

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