Setting Thesaurus Entry: Locker Room

Sight

Lockers, locks, tile floors, entrance to showers and gym, benches, bin for dirty towels, clothes poking out of closed lockers, mirrors, faucets, bathrooms, soap dispensers, dirt/hair/wrappers/etc on the floor, empty lockers with doors ajar, scuffed gym equipment, soiled sports paraphernalia…

Sounds

Shouts, laughter, teasing, hooting, hollering, the clink of locks bumping metal, the clang of metal doors opening and slamming shut, the thump of equipment being thrown on the benches, shoes scuffing against the floor, body spray hissing out of cans, the crinkle of potato chip bags pulled out of dufflels, backpacks or lockers, the snap of towels, zippers…

Smells

Sweat, body odor, body spray/perfume, deodorant, shampoo scented steam coming from adjoining showers, grass and mud from stains on football uniforms or soccer jerseys, wet towels, dirty clothes, bleach & pine cleaners, air fresheners, hair spray/gel

Tastes

Sweat, water, sports drinks, snacks from locker (power bars, chips, granola bars, candy, etc)

Touch

Soft cotton towels, cold locker doors, chipped paint on doors, ridged lock dials, hard zipper pulls, the splash of water on the face at the basin or from water poured over neck, sweat trickling over face, down the sides and back, the sweaty cling of uniforms, the dig of tight padding, gently probing a bruised area, scrape or other injury, the stretch or ache of…

Helpful hints:

–The words you choose can convey atmosphere and mood.

Example 1: I sagged onto the cold metal bench, sweat skating down my back and sides. The stink of my grungy pads and soaked uniform was almost enough to knock me out cold. My gaze stayed on the worn blue tiles at my feet as the others filed in. No one spoke; the dragging scuffle of shoes and lockers being opened with muted creaks spelled out our crippling loss just fine on their own…

–Similes and metaphors create strong imagery when used sparingly.

Example 1: (Simile) In the narrow, locker-lined room, the coach’s motivational speech made the team wince like it was being delivered through stadium speakers at a rock concert…

Think beyond what a character sees, and provide a sensory feast for readers

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8 Responses to Setting Thesaurus Entry: Locker Room

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  2. Mary Witzl says:

    Ewww, this took me right back to junior high school! Except for soft towels: ours were like Brillo pads, rough and scratchy enough to scour the skin off you.

    Beautifully evocative, as usual.

  3. Impressive site premise – first visit (probably not the last)!

  4. Printing this one!! I use lockers rooms ALOT. 🙂

  5. Angela says:

    Thanks, all! Sorry the post went up before the examples were in–I’d set the timestamp to AM, not PM…duh!

    It’s all fixed now. 😉

  6. PJ Hoover says:

    Locker room cracks me up. It’s such a perfect scene for YA!

  7. Lauren says:

    That’s a great way t set up the setting! I am so bad at working on setting. I might have to use this concept as a writing prompt! 🙂

  8. Bish Denham says:

    I never experienced the joy of a locker room as my school didn’t have a gym or phys-ed program. So this is a good one for me to refer to should I ever need a locker room scene.

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