Critiques 4 U, November Edition


I trust that everyone had a great Halloween—full of treats and short on tricks, preferably. It was tons of fun at my house this year. My son is obsessed with Darth Vader, so his costume was a no-brainer. After he declared his choice, my daughter decided to pair it up, and this interstellar awesomeness resulted:


I am your father. I mean, your brother. Wait a minute…

My 1980s cup overfloweth.

But Halloween is over, and man cannot live on cuteness alone. There are words to be chopped. Characters to be killed off. Entire plot lines to be reconsidered. That’s right: I has CRITIQUES 4 U! I’m opening submissions for this month’s contest today. For those of you who aren’t frantically NaNoWriMo’ing: if you’re working on something (no erotica, please) that needs fresh eyes, leave a comment that includes: 

1) your email address

2) the working title of your WIP

3) its genre

4) the intended audience


3 commenters’ names will be drawn and posted tomorrow. If you win, you can email me your first page and I’ll offer my feedback. Best of luck! And may the force be with you…


Becca Puglisi is an international speaker, writing coach, and bestselling author of The Emotion Thesaurus and its sequels. Her books are available in five languages, are sourced by US universities, and are used by novelists, screenwriters, editors, and psychologists around the world. She is passionate about learning and sharing her knowledge with others through her Writers Helping Writers blog and via One Stop For Writers—a powerhouse online library created to help writers elevate their storytelling. You can find Becca online at both of these spots, as well as on Facebook and Twitter.
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48 Responses to Critiques 4 U, November Edition

  1. LD Masterson says:

    I love your Star Wars kids. But I got here too late for the contest. Oh, well.

  2. Alrighty. The winners for this month are…

    Cheryl Matthynsssens
    Richard Neil
    Lynn Garrett

    Thanks for participating everyone, and for spreading the word to others. 🙂

  3. 1-alvaradofrazier at gmail dot com
    2-Strong Women Grow Here
    4-YA with Adult crossover potential

    Good luck everyone.

  4. Janet Smart says:

    Thanks, Becca. I love your little trick or treaters!
    Duck and Cover
    Middle Grade
    8-12 yr olds

  5. Vicki Kay says:


    Little Wolf

    Young Adult


  6. Adriana says:

    1) theoriginaladriana (at) gmail dot com

    2) The Perils of Penelope

    3) Upper Middle Grade Fantasy

    4) distinguishing 10-14 year olds with an affinity towards philosophy

  7. Pascal Inard says:

    1) inard (at)
    2) The memory snatcher
    3) Science Fiction
    4) Adult Science Fiction fans

    Thank you!

  8. Richard Neil says:

    Becoming the Wolf

    Thriller/Action Adventure

    Commercial Adult/New Adult

    Thank you for all the resources you have compiled for writers. They really come in handy for a cop who thinks he should write.

  9. Robbin Luckett says:

    1) Email address:
    2) Working Title: RELINQUISH
    3) YA Contemporary
    4) In an effort to solve an adoption mystery, the Protagonist must decide if she can keep a secret from her best friend in order to save the lives of the people she loves. (Theme: Adoption) (Intended audience: Teen)

  10. Lynn Garrett says:

  11. 1)
    2) Christmas Secrets
    3) Mainstream romance
    4) Teens to centenarians, mostly female.

  12. skipperZ says:

    1) aiarshai (at) gmail dot com

    2) Out of Mind

    3) Scifi

    4) Mainstream, so I guess adult

  13. Pamela Mason says:

    Thanks Becca!
    1. writermason (@) att . net
    2. Working title: That Summer We Baked
    3. Women’s Fiction, romantic elements
    4. Midlife women

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