October Critiques 4 U!


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I had SO MUCH FUN reading the first pages from last month’s Critiques 4 U contest winners. Thank you Terry Gene, Kelly Miller, and Heather Brady for being so brave as to let me read your work. And I was completely blown away by the response—over 70 entrants in that 24-hour period. With so many first pages out there just sitting around, waiting to be read, I need to get cracking.

Since Halloween is coming, along with my husband’s birthday and about a hundred soccer games, I’m opening submissions for this month’s contest today, before October gets totally whacko. If you’re working on something (no erotica, please) that needs fresh eyes, leave a comment that includes:

1) your email address (feel free to use “at” instead of @, etc.)

 2) the working title of your WIP

3) its genre

4) the intended audience


I’ll randomly draw 3 commenters and post the winners on Thursday. If you win, you can email me your first page and I’ll give you my feedback.

You’ve got 24 hours. GO!

Also, there are only 5 days left to register for our Marketing Marriage webinar that’s happening on October 13th. If you’re interested in learning how to put together a successful book launch or visibility event, this might be just the thing for you!


Becca Puglisi is an international speaker, writing coach, and bestselling author of The Emotion Thesaurus and its sequels. Her books are available in five languages, are sourced by US universities, and are used by novelists, screenwriters, editors, and psychologists around the world. She is passionate about learning and sharing her knowledge with others through her Writers Helping Writers blog and via One Stop For Writers—a powerhouse online library created to help writers elevate their storytelling. You can find Becca online at both of these spots, as well as on Facebook and Twitter.
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45 Responses to October Critiques 4 U!

  1. Yay! Thank you all so much for entering. The contest is now closed, and the winners for this month are…

    Mindy Hardwick
    Robyn Campbell
    Cayce LaCorte

    Congrats! I’ll be contacting you either today or tomorrow with the particulars so we can connect and I can get my hands on your literary goodies. Which won’t be as creepy as it sounds…

    Thanks all! Happy October 🙂

  2. Gail Kamer says:

    Journey of a Space Alien
    4th to 6th grade

  3. Thanks for this opportunity!



    Urban Fantasy


  4. Brett Jonas says:

    Thanks for the great offer! I may be too late, but thought I’d try!

    Brettgjonas at gmail.com
    The Grimsai
    Young Adult

  5. Margo Gibbs says:

    I’d love to be selected for a critique.

    1) Email address – margogibbs@optusnet.com.au
    2) Working title of your WIP – Mirabella The Mermaid Detective – The Case Of The Missing Cousin
    3) Genre – Fantasy/Adventure
    4) Intended audience – Children – first chapter book 7-11 year olds

    – See more at: https://writershelpingwriters.net/2014/10/october-critiques-4-u/#sthash.hi4MWv0w.dpuf

  6. skipperZ says:

    title: Out of Mind
    genre: Science Fiction
    audience: adult
    email: aiar shai (at) gmail dot com

  7. Thank you for this critique contest.
    1. purselanestudioatgmail.com
    2. Where the Evidence Leads
    3. inspirational mystery/romance
    4. adult women
    Blessings ~ Wendy ❀

  8. Wow, what a great opportunity! Thank you!

    1. krista.n.quintana(at)gmail.com
    2. The Orphans of Jadox
    3. Fantasy
    4. Young Adult

  9. Would love the opportunity, 🙂
    Romantic Suspense

  10. Jill W says:

    Thanks for the opportunity for a free critique!

    1) Email address – jilian2011(at)hotmail(dot)com
    2) Working title of your WIP – Starting Over
    3) Genre – Inspirational Romance
    4) Intended audience – Adult

  11. Rachel S. says:

    e-mail: randomrantsrcubed(at)gmail(dot)com


    Genre: Action-adventure

    Audience: 6th-8th grade (MG)

  12. Thanks for the opportunity.

    Title:The Bye Way Inn
    Genre:Inspirational Contemporary Romance
    Audience: Adult women

    Thanks again!

  13. Diana Lynn says:

    1) your email address – 19(dot)doerdi(dot)85atgmail(dot)com

    2) the working title of your WIP – Scent of a Husband

    3) genre – Women’s Lit/Romance

    4) the intended audience – Adult

  14. :Donna Marie says:

    I wish I had something to critique! 😀 Have fun with this!

  15. Anastasia says:

    Title: Bloodlife
    Genre: Sci-fi/supernatural
    Audience: Adult

  16. Siv Ekman says:

    Title: Issues of Trust
    Genre: Fantasy
    Audience: YA – Adult

  17. Sandy says:

    How fun!!!
    Happy birthday!!

    WIP women lit
    Still working on a title
    Maybe if I win and you get to read it you might be able to give me some suggestions.

    Thanks for the chance!!

  18. YaY for Halloween and soccer and football and yummy foods by the fire. WAHOOO!! Thanks for doing this.


    Genre: Contemporary/adventure

    Audience: MG


  19. Zoe O. says:

    Title: Unwinding Melody

    Genre/audience – Young adult realistic novel, kind of a dark romance

    Happy October to you!

  20. HL Gibson says:

    Title: The Secrets of Dr. John Welles

    Genre: Commercial Fiction

    Audience: Adult

  21. Diane Tracy says:

    WIP: Baby Baby Please Let Me Hold You
    Genre: adult fiction / gay fiction
    A married (male) couple tries to decide if they want a baby and how they will choose to do so

    Working on chapter 3 😉 thank you for this opportunity!!

  22. Alexandra Battey says:

    WIP title: The Relic
    Genre: YA sci-fi/fantasy
    Audience: YA-adult

    Thanks for offering this opportunity! 🙂

  23. SueAnn Porter says:

    Thank you for this opportunity to have something good happen!!

    WIP: Ambassador

    Genre: Spiritual

    Audience: YA-Adult

  24. Adriana says:

    Happy October!

    Title: The Perils of Penelope

    Genre: Fantasy

    Audience: Upper Middle Grade

    Thank you! 🙂

  25. Marilyn says:

    Thank you for the opportunity.
    Title: Mirage Rawnie’s Story
    Genre: Adult Fiction
    Audience: Adult Women

  26. Alice Murray says:

    WIP: Anna and Gracie

    Young adult-Drama

  27. Natasha Hanova says:

    Sounds like you’re gonna have a busy month. Bundle up for those games.

    Title: Marked
    Genre: Urban Fantasy
    Audience: YA

  28. Thank you so much for this opportunity and Happy Birthday to your hubs!

    WIP: Her Future Past
    Time-Travel Contemporary Western Romance – Adult

    Have a blessed day!

  29. Sylvia Ike says:

    WIP-The Vengeful Ones

    Genre- New Adult

    Audience- 18 and up

    Thanks so much for another opportunity:-)

  30. Hi!
    WIP: Secret of the Golden Heart

  31. Tammy Kirby says:

    Title: His Grace Forgiven

    Genre: Victorian – Inspirational (Edgy)


  32. WIP Title: Way

    Genre: YA fantasy novel

    Audience: teens and adults

    I would totally love your feedback.

  33. Very nice treat!

    Title: Winter Without Flowers
    genre: Women’s Contemporary
    Audience: Adult

  34. Sue Coletta says:

    I’m working on a new novel and would love fresh eyes to look at the first page. Usually once the novel is complete I rewrite the opening hook, but since you’re offering… The working title is “MARRED”, it’s an adult suspense/mystery. I’ve started this book in a way I have never done before with previous novels and I don’t know if it works or not, so thank you for this opportunity.

  35. Sweetheart Cottage–sweet, contemporary romance–adult and/or older teen

    mindywriter @ gmail dot com

  36. K Shivaun says:

    WIP: Eden’s Song
    Genre: Paranormal/Fantasy
    Audience: Y/A

  37. shelley says:

    I’d love some fresh eyes. With a touch of Merlot!

  38. Thank you!

    MG Fantasy Adventure
    Nicole.Zoltack AT gmail.com

  39. Di R says:

    WIP: Where The Heart Is
    Genre:Contemporary Romance


  40. Heidi says:

    Wow, thanks for this opportunity!!!

    WIP: Something Old
    Genre: Contemporary Romance
    Audience: Adult women

  41. skipperZ says:

    Title: Out of Mind
    Genre: Science Fiction
    Audience: Adult

  42. Janet Smart says:

    I’m in!
    Title: Duck and Cover
    Genre: MG
    Audience: 8-12 yr olds

    Thanks so much!

  43. Victoria Cleave says:

    WIP: Packet Gain
    Sci-fi / fantasy – adult

    Actually just a short story, but wouldn’t mind feedback on the first page.

    Thank you

  44. Victoria Cleave says:

    WIP: Packet Gain
    Sci-fi / fantasy – adult

    It is actually just a short story, but wouldn’t mind some feedback on the first page.

    Thank you

  45. Mary Jo Caffrey says:

    Great treat! Fans have an opportunity to get eagle editor eyes on their works. Thanks for this chance!

    Good luck on the field and happy birthday!

    Tittle: The Humpty Dumped Mystery

    Genre: Adult Humor-Fantasy

    Audience: YA-Adult

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