CONTEST CLOSED!
I trust that everyone had a great Halloween—full of treats and short on tricks, preferably. It was tons of fun at my house this year. My son is obsessed with Darth Vader, so his costume was a no-brainer. After he declared his choice, my daughter decided to pair it up, and this interstellar awesomeness resulted:

My 1980s cup overfloweth.
But Halloween is over, and man cannot live on cuteness alone. There are words to be chopped. Characters to be killed off. Entire plot lines to be reconsidered. That’s right: I has CRITIQUES 4 U! I’m opening submissions for this month’s contest today. For those of you who aren’t frantically NaNoWriMo’ing: if you’re working on something (no erotica, please) that needs fresh eyes, leave a comment that includes:
1) your email address
2) the working title of your WIP
3) its genre
4) the intended audience
ONLY ENTRIES THAT FOLLOW THESE INSTRUCTIONS WILL BE CONSIDERED.
3 commenters’ names will be drawn and posted tomorrow. If you win, you can email me your first page and I’ll offer my feedback. Best of luck! And may the force be with you…
Becca Puglisi is an international speaker, writing coach, and bestselling author of The Emotion Thesaurus and its sequels. Her books are available in five languages, are sourced by US universities, and are used by novelists, screenwriters, editors, and psychologists around the world. She is passionate about learning and sharing her knowledge with others through her Writers Helping Writers blog and via One Stop For Writers—a powerhouse online library created to help writers elevate their storytelling.
I love your Star Wars kids. But I got here too late for the contest. Oh, well.
Thanks, LD. And no worries. There will be another free critique next month, and this one’s going to be a big one. Stay tuned 🙂
Alrighty. The winners for this month are…
Cheryl Matthynsssens
Richard Neil
Lynn Garrett
Thanks for participating everyone, and for spreading the word to others. 🙂
1-alvaradofrazier at gmail dot com
2-Strong Women Grow Here
3-Contemporary
4-YA with Adult crossover potential
Good luck everyone.
Thanks, Becca. I love your little trick or treaters!
email: wvsmarties@yahoo.com
Duck and Cover
Middle Grade
8-12 yr olds
Thank you, Janet. This is such a great age. I know it won’t always be so fun, lol.
vicki.kay(at) outlook.com
Little Wolf
Young Adult
mainstream
1) theoriginaladriana (at) gmail dot com
2) The Perils of Penelope
3) Upper Middle Grade Fantasy
4) distinguishing 10-14 year olds with an affinity towards philosophy
1) inard (at) internode.on.net
2) The memory snatcher
3) Science Fiction
4) Adult Science Fiction fans
Thank you!
Richard@LEOtrainer.com
Becoming the Wolf
Thriller/Action Adventure
Commercial Adult/New Adult
Thank you for all the resources you have compiled for writers. They really come in handy for a cop who thinks he should write.
1) Email address: robbinluckett@gmail.com
2) Working Title: RELINQUISH
3) YA Contemporary
4) In an effort to solve an adoption mystery, the Protagonist must decide if she can keep a secret from her best friend in order to save the lives of the people she loves. (Theme: Adoption) (Intended audience: Teen)
lgarrett@conwaycorp.net
TARA’S SONG
Romance
Women
1) Susanne.McCarthyX@gmail.com
2) Christmas Secrets
3) Mainstream romance
4) Teens to centenarians, mostly female.
1) aiarshai (at) gmail dot com
2) Out of Mind
3) Scifi
4) Mainstream, so I guess adult
Thanks Becca!
1. writermason (@) att . net
2. Working title: That Summer We Baked
3. Women’s Fiction, romantic elements
4. Midlife women
jmcsween@san.org
ZAKE ALLGOOD, DUGOUT SUPER-SPY
Middle Grade
10-year-old boys
Thank you!
You have a darling interstellar pair. Thank you for a chance to be critiqued.
1. E-mail: jeanne@bdgreen.com
2. Title: Something is Looming at Shadow Hollow
3. Genre: Middle Grade Fiction
4. Intended Audience: 8 to 12-year-olds
Thanks, Jeanne 🙂
Your kids make a perfect interstellar pair! Thanks for my chance of a critique.
1. My e-mail: jean@herbiesplace.com
2. Title: Something is Looming in Shadow Hollow
3. Genre: Middle Grade Fiction
4. Intended Audience: 8 to 12-year-olds
You are soooooo wonderful!
1. dgweidner [at] gmail [dot] com
2. LAURENT AND LAVINIA-A Match Made in Heaven
3. picture book
4. ages 4-6
Aww, shucks 🙂
Such adorable children are destined to rule the galaxy.
Thank you for this opportunity.
email: philryan49@hotmail.com
Working Title: Tears of Boudicca
Genre: Alternate-History Fantasy
Audience: Adult Fantasy fans
Thank you, Phillip. Unfortunately, I think they agree with you…
dragonsgeas@gmail.com
Working Title – The Bloodmine
Fantasy
lovers of intelligent dragons, sword and sorcery and like to root for the underdog.
Wow what a generous offer! So my novel Crashing into Different is a contemporary YA intended for older young adults.
Thanks so much for putting this out there for people.
Rhay
Thanks for the great opportunity 🙂
jbiggar@telusplanet.net
Jared
Romantic Suspense
Adult readers interested in HOT heroes and strong women!
Judi Schiller
schiller@emily.net
Working Title: At Home Behind The Sun
Genre: Romantic Thriller
Readers who enjoyed Tony Hillerman
Thank you for the chance!
Nicole.Zoltack@gmail.com
FLY UP HIGH
Steampunk
Adult
Thanks for the opportunity, Becca.
jaweatherholt[at]gmail[dot]com
Working Title: Paid in Full
Genre: Contemporary Romance
Intended audience: women
1) your email address
clmanges {at} yahoo.com
2) the working title of your WIP
Fly Away Home
3) its genre
Science fiction
4) the intended audience
Adult SF
Your kids looked great! Thanks for doing this!
krista.n.quintana@gmail.com
The Orphans of Jadox
Fantasy
Young Adult
email address: lidywilks2@gmail.com
WIP Title: Nadia, the Hidden Fire Witch
Genre: Young Adult Supernatural
Intended Audience: teens age 12+ and fans of Supernatural, The Secret Circle, Witches of East End and/or Charmed.
Working Title: Pheala’s Leaves
Genre: Fantasy
Audience: Young Adults
Thanks for the opportunity. Fresh eyes are sometimes had to find.
1.) scarlettkol@outlook.com
2.) Mercury Rises
3.) SF / Fairytale retell
4.) YA
Title:Mirage Rawnie’s Story
Genre: Adult Fiction
Target: Adults
1) chyny18@aol.com
2) Working title- The Vengeful Ones
3) Genre-New Adult
4) target audience- 18+ interested in thrillers
heathercq@gmail.com
THE CARDINAL SIGN
YA Contemporary Fantasy
teens/YA
Journey of a Space Alien–realistic mixed with Sci fi intended for middle grades from 9 to 12.
Thank Becca for sharing the cute photo of your children. They’re adorable.
I’d like to enter your critiques 4 U contest. My email address is dorisk.stone@gmail.com. My WIP is “Planting Petunia’s with Papa.” It is a 400 word picture book that is written for 4-8 year old children. Thank you for this opportunity!
gstephens922@yahoo.com
Working Title: Dare to Dream
Genre: YA
Intended audience: older tweens and young teens
Thank you for the opportunity!
Becca,
Love the photo.
My work in progress: Peek-a-Boo-Friends (Picture book–ages 4-6)
Linda Andersen– landersen74@yahoo.com
Thanks for offering this great treat even though Halloween and its cuteness has passed.
Title: Mirage, Rawnie’s story
Genre: Adult fiction
Target: Women
Woo hoo! Thanks, Becca!
tom@tomthreadgill.com
Grinder
Christian suspense/thriller
intended for adults
brettgjonas@gmail.com
The Grimsai
YA Fantasy
Thank you!
I’ll play 🙂 My email address is linked to the comment. I’ve just finished drafting a contemporary YA piece with the working title Amara. I wrote it specifically for 16 year old girls.
Working Title: Murder in Dripping Springs
Genre: Mystery
Audience: General readers of commercial fiction, readers who enjoy “cozy” mysteries
1) hapaxia[encirlced’a’]gmail[smallrounddot]com
2) Working title: Electville
3) SF & Fantasy
4) Readers interested in dystopian SF.