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Critiques 4 U, April Edition

April 28, 2015 by BECCA PUGLISI

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Spring!

CONTEST IS CLOSED! SEE YOU NEXT MONTH 🙂

Can you believe that it’s April already? Seems like we were just setting resolutions, breaking resolutions, and racing out for last-minute Valentine’s Day presents. Time surely does fly, because here we are at the tail end of April, giving away 3 more first page critiques.

If you’re working on a first page and would like some objective feedback, leave a comment that includes: 

1) your email address

2) your story’s genre (no erotica, please)

3) the intended audience

ONLY ENTRIES THAT FOLLOW THESE INSTRUCTIONS WILL BE CONSIDERED. 

Psssst! Last month, one of the winners didn’t leave an email address and I had to pick an alternate. Please don’t forget all the important info :).

3 commenters’ names will be drawn and posted tomorrow. If you win, you can email me your first page and I’ll offer my feedback. Best of luck!

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BECCA PUGLISI
BECCA PUGLISI

Becca Puglisi is an international speaker, writing coach, and bestselling author of The Emotion Thesaurus and its sequels. Her books are available in five languages, are sourced by US universities, and are used by novelists, screenwriters, editors, and psychologists around the world. She is passionate about learning and sharing her knowledge with others through her Writers Helping Writers blog and via One Stop For Writers—a powerhouse online library created to help writers elevate their storytelling.

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  1. BECCA PUGLISI says

    April 29, 2015 at 9:47 am

    And this month’s winners are…

    Carol Baldwin
    Heidi U
    Carolee

    Thanks for entering, and for spreading the word about the contest. See you all in May!

  2. Isabelle says

    April 29, 2015 at 6:26 am

    Just a Quick question. What rules are there for a page? I’m guessing a Word page, but what about double spaced, font and font size?

    Thank you again for doing this. ❤️

    • BECCA PUGLISI says

      April 29, 2015 at 7:46 am

      Hi, Isabelle. The first page will be double-spaced, 12-point font :).

      • Isabelle says

        April 29, 2015 at 9:22 am

        Thank you.

  3. Dylan Jones says

    April 29, 2015 at 4:55 am

    1. jones.dylan19@yahoo.com

    2. Historical-Fiction

    3. YA 18+

  4. Krista Quintana says

    April 28, 2015 at 10:33 pm

    Thank you!

    1. krista.n.quintana@gmail.com
    2. Fantasy
    3. YA

  5. Melanie Marttila says

    April 28, 2015 at 10:12 pm

    Giving it a try ’cause openings kick my writerly butt.

    1. melanie (dot) marttila (at) gmail (dot) com
    2. Epic fantasy
    3. Readers who enjoy Julie Czerneda’s A Turn of Light or the Celtic-inspired novels of Juliet Marillier

    • BECCA PUGLISI says

      April 29, 2015 at 7:46 am

      Openings kick all of our butts. They suck.

  6. Gretchen Stone says

    April 28, 2015 at 9:54 pm

    1) GretchStone@aol.com
    2) Women’s Contemporary Fiction
    3) Adult

    I am using the Emotion Thesaurus, as well as the Positive and Negative Trait books as I am doing my edits. They add a layer on every page.

    • BECCA PUGLISI says

      April 29, 2015 at 7:47 am

      So glad to hear it, Gretchen!

  7. henya says

    April 28, 2015 at 9:37 pm

    1. henyad@gmail.com
    2. Action/Thriller
    3. Adult

  8. Margaret Simon says

    April 28, 2015 at 9:30 pm

    margaretsmn at gmail.com
    Middle grade realistic fiction
    ages 8-12

  9. Augustina Van Hoven says

    April 28, 2015 at 9:11 pm

    Thank your for the opportunity.

    1) augustina@augustinavanhoven.com
    2) paranormal romance
    3) adult

  10. Russell says

    April 28, 2015 at 7:45 pm

    Russ.baker@comcast.net
    YA
    teens

  11. Heidi U says

    April 28, 2015 at 7:31 pm

    Email: Haulrich5@gmail.com
    Genre: Contemporary Romance
    Audience: adult women

  12. Pascal Inard says

    April 28, 2015 at 5:51 pm

    Sorry forgot my email address, so I’ll try again:
    1. inard@internode.on.net
    2. Science Fiction
    3. Adult

    Thanks!

  13. Pascal Inard says

    April 28, 2015 at 5:49 pm

    1. The Memory Snatcher
    2. Science Fiction
    3. Adult

    Thanks a lot Becca!

  14. Christine Read says

    April 28, 2015 at 5:39 pm

    1) readchris@shaw.ca
    2) humorous contemporary middle grade
    3) 7-11

  15. Aline LaForge says

    April 28, 2015 at 4:03 pm

    Self-publishing my debut novel through my company. Excited to catch this, hoping my entry makes it out of the hat:

    1/ Aline.laforge [At] gmail[dot] com
    2/ YA / adult
    3/ Oceania folktale

  16. Sharon says

    April 28, 2015 at 4:01 pm

    I love that you guys walk the walk as writers helping other writers. (Now if I could get lucky and win this critique).
    1. Sharon@sharonleehughson.com
    2. YA romance
    3 14 to 18 year old girls

  17. Linda Strawn says

    April 28, 2015 at 3:44 pm

    Can’t pass this up.

    1) lindastrawn at yahoo.com

    2) Inspirational Fiction

    3) Mature teens and older

  18. Mona AlvaradoFrazier says

    April 28, 2015 at 2:58 pm

    Hi, what a great opportunity to have a chance for a professional critique from a SCBWI instructor.

    Here’s my info:

    1) alvaradofrazier at gmail.com
    2) YA / Adult
    3) Ages 16 and up

  19. Talia says

    April 28, 2015 at 2:36 pm

    Thanks for this opportunity!

    Email: taliaprewette@comcast.net
    Genre: Sci-fi
    Audience: Kids ages 6-15 or so

  20. Leia Ann says

    April 28, 2015 at 2:00 pm

    1) leiawriting@gmail.com
    2) Urban Fantasy, magical realism (no romance)
    3) Adults

  21. R. E. Hunter says

    April 28, 2015 at 12:50 pm

    1. r (dot) e (dot) hunter (at) gmail (dot) com
    2. Technothriller
    3. Adults

  22. Holly Kerr says

    April 28, 2015 at 12:28 pm

    thanks for the opportunity!!!
    1)your email address – holly@kerr.ca
    2) your story’s genre – chicklit/spy thriller
    3) the intended audience – adult

  23. Fritzie von Jessen says

    April 28, 2015 at 12:17 pm

    1) fvonjessen@aol.com
    2) general fiction
    3) adults/women

  24. Karen Lynne Klink says

    April 28, 2015 at 12:02 pm

    1) karen2silver@yahoo.com
    2) historical fiction
    3) adults/new adults

    I use your Emotion Thesaurus all the time and suggest it to other writers. Obviously it’s a big help.

    • BECCA PUGLISI says

      April 28, 2015 at 3:35 pm

      Thanks for sharing your good experiences with The ET. I’m always happy to hear how it’s helping writers 🙂

  25. JC Martell says

    April 28, 2015 at 11:51 am

    Thank you for this opportunity -along with all the many other valuable resources you provide writers.

    EMAIL: jcmartellgm at gmail dot com
    GENRE: Women’s Fiction
    AUDIENCE: Adult

  26. Halli Gomez says

    April 28, 2015 at 11:35 am

    Thank you so much for this offer. I have my fingers crossed!

    Here is my information:
    1. hbgwriter6@gmail.com
    2. middle grade – sci-fi
    3. kids 9-12 years old

  27. Carolee says

    April 28, 2015 at 11:31 am

    Yay for spring and for crits! 🙂

    caroleenoury(at)gmail(dot)com
    YA (fantasy)
    YA fans of all ages!

  28. Caroline Sciriha says

    April 28, 2015 at 11:21 am

    Thanks for this opportunity. I would also like to thank you for this website: I’ve found loads of help here and in the thesaurus collections.

    My email is csciriha[at]go dot net dot mt
    Genre: Fantasy / SF
    Audience: middle grade

    • BECCA PUGLISI says

      April 28, 2015 at 11:23 am

      I’m so glad you’re finding some useful info here, Caroline. Good luck!

  29. Kate @ The Magic Violinist says

    April 28, 2015 at 11:07 am

    This is a fantastic idea. 🙂 I’m getting ready to query soon, too, so perfect timing!

    1. themagicviolinist(AT)gmail(DOT)com
    2. YA contemporary romance
    3. Teens, 13-18

  30. Pat says

    April 28, 2015 at 11:04 am

    Thank you for this opportunity, again, and for your advice in general.
    My email is in the required field. My WIP is called Looking for Heaven and it is a post-apocalyptic story for young/new adults.

  31. Curtis Manges says

    April 28, 2015 at 11:01 am

    Count me in, Becca!

    1) your email address: clmanges@yahoo.com
    2) your story’s genre: Science fiction
    3) the intended audience: adult

    Thanks!

  32. Ellen Pridmore says

    April 28, 2015 at 10:41 am

    1. elpridmore@comcast.net
    2. picture book
    3. ages 4-7

    Thank you!

  33. Jarm Del Boccio says

    April 28, 2015 at 10:39 am

    Thanks for this!

    1. Jarm@me.com
    2. Historical Fiction
    3. Middle Grade

    Take care . . .Jarm

  34. Southpaw HR Sinclair says

    April 28, 2015 at 10:32 am

    It surely is spring, though winter is hanging on for its dear life here. Daffodils and tulips have sprouted. It’s too bad their days are numbered.

    I have an urban fantasy for adults with the awesome title: WIP. My email is in the required field, does that work?

    • BECCA PUGLISI says

      April 28, 2015 at 10:33 am

      As long as that email is up=to-date, that’s fine. Thanks!

      • Southpaw HR Sinclair says

        April 28, 2015 at 11:00 am

        It is, but I panicked for a minute and had to double check it with this reply.

  35. Kristen G. Johnson says

    April 28, 2015 at 10:23 am

    Hello! Thanks for the chance to win 🙂
    1. kristengjohnson (at) gmail (.) com
    2. Children’s chapter books
    3. Boys 7-11

    Thanks

  36. Irene Wittig says

    April 28, 2015 at 10:19 am

    Thank you for this opportunity.
    My email is GiganteJune@gmail.com
    Genre: literary/historical fiction (Austria 20th cent.)
    audience: adults

  37. FCS says

    April 28, 2015 at 10:07 am

    1) Email address: eisen5585 at yahoo dot com
    2) Story’s genre: Speculative Fiction
    3) Intended audience: Young adults

  38. Scarlett Kol says

    April 28, 2015 at 10:02 am

    1) scarlettkol@outlook.com
    2) paranormal romance
    3) YA

    Thank you!

  39. Isabelle says

    April 28, 2015 at 9:59 am

    1) icrusoe@live.se
    2) Fantasy
    3) Ya/Na

  40. Margaret Hawke says

    April 28, 2015 at 9:45 am

    My e-mail address is mhawke1962@gmail. com. My genre for this book is cozy mystery. The intended audience is general, though, particularly for those who enjoy mysteries without intense sex or violence.

    Thank you for any consideration you can give me!

  41. Carol Baldwin says

    April 28, 2015 at 9:37 am

    cbaldwin6@me.com
    historical fiction
    young adult

    Thanks!

  42. Sylvia Ike says

    April 28, 2015 at 9:15 am

    Good morning!
    My email address is chyny18@aol.com
    Story genre-young adult
    targeted audience 18+
    Thank you!

  43. Telfer Rose says

    April 28, 2015 at 9:01 am

    telferrose@hotmail.com
    Title – Blood of the Ancient
    Genre – action/adventure, fantasy, scifi
    Audience – YA – Adult
    Many thanks Becca 🙂

  44. Linda Andersen says

    April 28, 2015 at 8:20 am

    Becca and Angela,

    Thanks for the recent win of a first page critique. I won’t enter this time because I would like someone else to have that opportunity. I did want to share that I recently returned from a Highlight’s PB workshop and I am once again reworking the story you critiqued. It’s still not PB ready, but I am determined to whip it in shape. I think I have a much stronger manuscript forming in my head. Thanks for helping me along my journey.

    Thanks for all you do for other writers!

    • BECCA PUGLISI says

      April 28, 2015 at 9:52 am

      It’s truly my pleasure, Linda. I’m glad that you enjoyed the Highlights workshop. I’m leading a workshop this weekend, and I’m super excited to meet new writers and share our experiences. We learn so much that way. Best of luck with your story!

  45. JoAnn says

    April 28, 2015 at 8:04 am

    Entering the chance to win a critique of the first page:
    joann.franklin2014@gmail.com
    women’s fiction
    women (and men who like to think about complex problems)

  46. Alyssa says

    April 28, 2015 at 6:01 am

    Yay, thanks so much for this! (And for all the other fabulous posts, of course :D)

    Email: alyssa.carlier[at]gmail.com
    Genre: Fantasy
    Audience: YA

  47. Carole Lindstrom says

    April 28, 2015 at 5:55 am

    1) carlindza at gmail dot com

    2) contemporary YA

    3) 13-17

    Thank you. 🙂

  48. Diana says

    April 28, 2015 at 5:52 am

    1) dicunhagil@hotmail.com
    2) romance
    3) adults/young adults

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