
CONTEST IS CLOSED! SEE YOU NEXT MONTH 🙂
Can you believe that it’s April already? Seems like we were just setting resolutions, breaking resolutions, and racing out for last-minute Valentine’s Day presents. Time surely does fly, because here we are at the tail end of April, giving away 3 more first page critiques.
If you’re working on a first page and would like some objective feedback, leave a comment that includes:
1) your email address
2) your story’s genre (no erotica, please)
3) the intended audience
ONLY ENTRIES THAT FOLLOW THESE INSTRUCTIONS WILL BE CONSIDERED.
Psssst! Last month, one of the winners didn’t leave an email address and I had to pick an alternate. Please don’t forget all the important info :).
3 commenters’ names will be drawn and posted tomorrow. If you win, you can email me your first page and I’ll offer my feedback. Best of luck!
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Becca Puglisi is an international speaker, writing coach, and bestselling author of The Emotion Thesaurus and its sequels. Her books are available in five languages, are sourced by US universities, and are used by novelists, screenwriters, editors, and psychologists around the world. She is passionate about learning and sharing her knowledge with others through her Writers Helping Writers blog and via One Stop For Writers—a powerhouse online library created to help writers elevate their storytelling.
And this month’s winners are…
Carol Baldwin
Heidi U
Carolee
Thanks for entering, and for spreading the word about the contest. See you all in May!
Just a Quick question. What rules are there for a page? I’m guessing a Word page, but what about double spaced, font and font size?
Thank you again for doing this. ❤️
Hi, Isabelle. The first page will be double-spaced, 12-point font :).
Thank you.
1. jones.dylan19@yahoo.com
2. Historical-Fiction
3. YA 18+
Thank you!
1. krista.n.quintana@gmail.com
2. Fantasy
3. YA
Giving it a try ’cause openings kick my writerly butt.
1. melanie (dot) marttila (at) gmail (dot) com
2. Epic fantasy
3. Readers who enjoy Julie Czerneda’s A Turn of Light or the Celtic-inspired novels of Juliet Marillier
Openings kick all of our butts. They suck.
1) GretchStone@aol.com
2) Women’s Contemporary Fiction
3) Adult
I am using the Emotion Thesaurus, as well as the Positive and Negative Trait books as I am doing my edits. They add a layer on every page.
So glad to hear it, Gretchen!
1. henyad@gmail.com
2. Action/Thriller
3. Adult
margaretsmn at gmail.com
Middle grade realistic fiction
ages 8-12
Thank your for the opportunity.
1) augustina@augustinavanhoven.com
2) paranormal romance
3) adult
Russ.baker@comcast.net
YA
teens
Email: Haulrich5@gmail.com
Genre: Contemporary Romance
Audience: adult women
Sorry forgot my email address, so I’ll try again:
1. inard@internode.on.net
2. Science Fiction
3. Adult
Thanks!
1. The Memory Snatcher
2. Science Fiction
3. Adult
Thanks a lot Becca!
1) readchris@shaw.ca
2) humorous contemporary middle grade
3) 7-11
Self-publishing my debut novel through my company. Excited to catch this, hoping my entry makes it out of the hat:
1/ Aline.laforge [At] gmail[dot] com
2/ YA / adult
3/ Oceania folktale
I love that you guys walk the walk as writers helping other writers. (Now if I could get lucky and win this critique).
1. Sharon@sharonleehughson.com
2. YA romance
3 14 to 18 year old girls
Can’t pass this up.
1) lindastrawn at yahoo.com
2) Inspirational Fiction
3) Mature teens and older
Hi, what a great opportunity to have a chance for a professional critique from a SCBWI instructor.
Here’s my info:
1) alvaradofrazier at gmail.com
2) YA / Adult
3) Ages 16 and up
Thanks for this opportunity!
Email: taliaprewette@comcast.net
Genre: Sci-fi
Audience: Kids ages 6-15 or so
1) leiawriting@gmail.com
2) Urban Fantasy, magical realism (no romance)
3) Adults
1. r (dot) e (dot) hunter (at) gmail (dot) com
2. Technothriller
3. Adults
thanks for the opportunity!!!
1)your email address – holly@kerr.ca
2) your story’s genre – chicklit/spy thriller
3) the intended audience – adult
1) fvonjessen@aol.com
2) general fiction
3) adults/women
1) karen2silver@yahoo.com
2) historical fiction
3) adults/new adults
I use your Emotion Thesaurus all the time and suggest it to other writers. Obviously it’s a big help.
Thanks for sharing your good experiences with The ET. I’m always happy to hear how it’s helping writers 🙂
Thank you for this opportunity -along with all the many other valuable resources you provide writers.
EMAIL: jcmartellgm at gmail dot com
GENRE: Women’s Fiction
AUDIENCE: Adult
Thank you so much for this offer. I have my fingers crossed!
Here is my information:
1. hbgwriter6@gmail.com
2. middle grade – sci-fi
3. kids 9-12 years old
Yay for spring and for crits! 🙂
caroleenoury(at)gmail(dot)com
YA (fantasy)
YA fans of all ages!
Thanks for this opportunity. I would also like to thank you for this website: I’ve found loads of help here and in the thesaurus collections.
My email is csciriha[at]go dot net dot mt
Genre: Fantasy / SF
Audience: middle grade
I’m so glad you’re finding some useful info here, Caroline. Good luck!
This is a fantastic idea. 🙂 I’m getting ready to query soon, too, so perfect timing!
1. themagicviolinist(AT)gmail(DOT)com
2. YA contemporary romance
3. Teens, 13-18
Thank you for this opportunity, again, and for your advice in general.
My email is in the required field. My WIP is called Looking for Heaven and it is a post-apocalyptic story for young/new adults.
Count me in, Becca!
1) your email address: clmanges@yahoo.com
2) your story’s genre: Science fiction
3) the intended audience: adult
Thanks!
1. elpridmore@comcast.net
2. picture book
3. ages 4-7
Thank you!
Thanks for this!
1. Jarm@me.com
2. Historical Fiction
3. Middle Grade
Take care . . .Jarm
It surely is spring, though winter is hanging on for its dear life here. Daffodils and tulips have sprouted. It’s too bad their days are numbered.
I have an urban fantasy for adults with the awesome title: WIP. My email is in the required field, does that work?
As long as that email is up=to-date, that’s fine. Thanks!
It is, but I panicked for a minute and had to double check it with this reply.
Hello! Thanks for the chance to win 🙂
1. kristengjohnson (at) gmail (.) com
2. Children’s chapter books
3. Boys 7-11
Thanks
Thank you for this opportunity.
My email is GiganteJune@gmail.com
Genre: literary/historical fiction (Austria 20th cent.)
audience: adults
1) Email address: eisen5585 at yahoo dot com
2) Story’s genre: Speculative Fiction
3) Intended audience: Young adults
1) scarlettkol@outlook.com
2) paranormal romance
3) YA
Thank you!
1) icrusoe@live.se
2) Fantasy
3) Ya/Na
My e-mail address is mhawke1962@gmail. com. My genre for this book is cozy mystery. The intended audience is general, though, particularly for those who enjoy mysteries without intense sex or violence.
Thank you for any consideration you can give me!
cbaldwin6@me.com
historical fiction
young adult
Thanks!
Good morning!
My email address is chyny18@aol.com
Story genre-young adult
targeted audience 18+
Thank you!
telferrose@hotmail.com
Title – Blood of the Ancient
Genre – action/adventure, fantasy, scifi
Audience – YA – Adult
Many thanks Becca 🙂
Becca and Angela,
Thanks for the recent win of a first page critique. I won’t enter this time because I would like someone else to have that opportunity. I did want to share that I recently returned from a Highlight’s PB workshop and I am once again reworking the story you critiqued. It’s still not PB ready, but I am determined to whip it in shape. I think I have a much stronger manuscript forming in my head. Thanks for helping me along my journey.
Thanks for all you do for other writers!
It’s truly my pleasure, Linda. I’m glad that you enjoyed the Highlights workshop. I’m leading a workshop this weekend, and I’m super excited to meet new writers and share our experiences. We learn so much that way. Best of luck with your story!
Entering the chance to win a critique of the first page:
joann.franklin2014@gmail.com
women’s fiction
women (and men who like to think about complex problems)
Yay, thanks so much for this! (And for all the other fabulous posts, of course :D)
Email: alyssa.carlier[at]gmail.com
Genre: Fantasy
Audience: YA
1) carlindza at gmail dot com
2) contemporary YA
3) 13-17
Thank you. 🙂
1) dicunhagil@hotmail.com
2) romance
3) adults/young adults