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Critiques 4 U, April Edition

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Spring!

CONTEST IS CLOSED! SEE YOU NEXT MONTH 🙂

Can you believe that it’s April already? Seems like we were just setting resolutions, breaking resolutions, and racing out for last-minute Valentine’s Day presents. Time surely does fly, because here we are at the tail end of April, giving away 3 more first page critiques.

If you’re working on a first page and would like some objective feedback, leave a comment that includes: 

1) your email address

2) your story’s genre (no erotica, please)

3) the intended audience

ONLY ENTRIES THAT FOLLOW THESE INSTRUCTIONS WILL BE CONSIDERED. 

Psssst! Last month, one of the winners didn’t leave an email address and I had to pick an alternate. Please don’t forget all the important info :).

3 commenters’ names will be drawn and posted tomorrow. If you win, you can email me your first page and I’ll offer my feedback. Best of luck!

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Comments

  1. BECCA PUGLISI says

    And this month’s winners are…

    Carol Baldwin
    Heidi U
    Carolee

    Thanks for entering, and for spreading the word about the contest. See you all in May!

  2. Isabelle says

    Just a Quick question. What rules are there for a page? I’m guessing a Word page, but what about double spaced, font and font size?

    Thank you again for doing this. ❤️

  5. Melanie Marttila says

    Giving it a try ’cause openings kick my writerly butt.

    1. melanie (dot) marttila (at) gmail (dot) com
    2. Epic fantasy
    3. Readers who enjoy Julie Czerneda’s A Turn of Light or the Celtic-inspired novels of Juliet Marillier

  6. Gretchen Stone says

    1) GretchStone@aol.com
    2) Women’s Contemporary Fiction
    3) Adult

    I am using the Emotion Thesaurus, as well as the Positive and Negative Trait books as I am doing my edits. They add a layer on every page.

  15. Aline LaForge says

    Self-publishing my debut novel through my company. Excited to catch this, hoping my entry makes it out of the hat:

    1/ Aline.laforge [At] gmail[dot] com
    2/ YA / adult
    3/ Oceania folktale

  18. Mona AlvaradoFrazier says

    Hi, what a great opportunity to have a chance for a professional critique from a SCBWI instructor.

    Here’s my info:

    1) alvaradofrazier at gmail.com
    2) YA / Adult
    3) Ages 16 and up

  25. JC Martell says

    Thank you for this opportunity -along with all the many other valuable resources you provide writers.

    EMAIL: jcmartellgm at gmail dot com
    GENRE: Women’s Fiction
    AUDIENCE: Adult

  27. Carolee says

    Yay for spring and for crits! 🙂

    caroleenoury(at)gmail(dot)com
    YA (fantasy)
    YA fans of all ages!

  28. Caroline Sciriha says

    Thanks for this opportunity. I would also like to thank you for this website: I’ve found loads of help here and in the thesaurus collections.

    My email is csciriha[at]go dot net dot mt
    Genre: Fantasy / SF
    Audience: middle grade

  30. Pat says

    Thank you for this opportunity, again, and for your advice in general.
    My email is in the required field. My WIP is called Looking for Heaven and it is a post-apocalyptic story for young/new adults.

  34. Southpaw HR Sinclair says

    It surely is spring, though winter is hanging on for its dear life here. Daffodils and tulips have sprouted. It’s too bad their days are numbered.

    I have an urban fantasy for adults with the awesome title: WIP. My email is in the required field, does that work?

  35. Kristen G. Johnson says

    Hello! Thanks for the chance to win 🙂
    1. kristengjohnson (at) gmail (.) com
    2. Children’s chapter books
    3. Boys 7-11

    Thanks

  37. FCS says

    1) Email address: eisen5585 at yahoo dot com
    2) Story’s genre: Speculative Fiction
    3) Intended audience: Young adults

  40. Margaret Hawke says

    My e-mail address is mhawke1962@gmail. com. My genre for this book is cozy mystery. The intended audience is general, though, particularly for those who enjoy mysteries without intense sex or violence.

    Thank you for any consideration you can give me!

  44. Linda Andersen says

    Becca and Angela,

    Thanks for the recent win of a first page critique. I won’t enter this time because I would like someone else to have that opportunity. I did want to share that I recently returned from a Highlight’s PB workshop and I am once again reworking the story you critiqued. It’s still not PB ready, but I am determined to whip it in shape. I think I have a much stronger manuscript forming in my head. Thanks for helping me along my journey.

    Thanks for all you do for other writers!

    • BECCA PUGLISI says

      It’s truly my pleasure, Linda. I’m glad that you enjoyed the Highlights workshop. I’m leading a workshop this weekend, and I’m super excited to meet new writers and share our experiences. We learn so much that way. Best of luck with your story!

  46. Alyssa says

    Yay, thanks so much for this! (And for all the other fabulous posts, of course :D)

    Email: alyssa.carlier[at]gmail.com
    Genre: Fantasy
    Audience: YA

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