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Critiques 4 U, July Edition

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CONTEST CLOSED!

Happy Summer, everyone! I hope you’re enjoying the sunshine and warm weather as much as I am. I’d like to see more of it, but I’m in the process of editing all of our thesaurus content to make it neat and tidy for our One Stop For Writers™ launch this fall.  do love to edit, but too much of it makes me crabby, so it’s time to take a little break and do some critiquing!

If you’re working on a first page and would like some objective feedback, leave a comment that includes: 

1) your email address. Some of you have expressed concern about making your email address public; if you’re sure that the email address associated with your WordPress account is correct, you don’t have to include it here. But if you do win and I’m unable to contact you through that email address, I’ll have to choose an alternate winner.

2) your story’s genre (no erotica, please)

3) the intended audience

~ONLY ENTRIES THAT FOLLOW THESE INSTRUCTIONS WILL BE CONSIDERED~ 

Three commenters’ names will be randomly drawn and posted tomorrow. If you win, you can email me your first page and I’ll offer my feedback. Best of luck!

*photo credit: Pixabay

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  2. BECCA PUGLISI says

    And the winners are….

    Sacha Black
    Shanna Rodgers
    Cathy Smallwood

    I’ll be in touch, ladies. And thanks, everyone, for entering. I’ll see you next month!

  6. Leila says

    leilarheaume at gmail dot com
    Genre: Contemporary Romance
    Audience: NA

    Thanks again, Becca!

  9. Susan in TX says

    Contemporary romance . . . first love, second chance . . . then (23 years ago) and now
    For women, mid 30’s and older

  10. Ariadne says

    The title of my WIP: Enamored With You.
    Targeted audience: Anyone 15+ who loves historical romance written from first person pov (from the MMC’s point of view) and in present tense.
    Email: Ariadnecaradoc@gmail.com

    Thank you for the offer, :):):)

  11. Ariadne says

    The title of my WIP: Enamored With You.
    The targeted audience: Any 15+ audience who loves intense historical romance with word count of 96k.

    ariadnecaradoc@gmail.com

    It’s my second attempt at writing a novel and is written in the MMC’s point of view and in present tense. Thank you for doing this, 🙂

  13. Diana Lynn says

    1) your email address. It’s listed correctly above.

    2) your story’s genre (no erotica, please) Women’s Fiction

    3) the intended audience – women 35+ ■ Empty nesters or soon to be.

    Thank you. And I want to mention that I love the thesaurus books.

  14. Sheila Good says

    My first novel, in progress:
    Genre: Women’s fiction
    Audience: Adult women 18+
    Working Title: Hello Hell
    I love your site and use your books nearly every time I sit down to write. Thank you for providing excellent references.,

  15. Ambiguous_A says

    Genre: Thriller

    Audience: NA. But maybe YA and maybe adult, too. My protag is 19.

    Thanks for offering this!

  18. JC Martell says

    Thanks again for the opportunity to “access your wisdom”…. Can’t wait for “One Stop for Writers”

    EMAIL: jcmartellgm at gmail dot com
    GENRE: Women’s Fiction (or Romance)
    AUDIENCE: Women 30+

  21. Deborah Baran says

    Historical Fiction based on a true story
    Title: In The Shadow of Willow Run
    Audience: History (WWII) buffs
    My story focuses on two protagonists, both Rosie the Riveters, and how they got through WWII on the home front. One survives while the other does not.

  23. Cathy Smallwood says

    cathysmallwood at hotmail dot com

    Psychotherapy fiction: 1st person POV, alternating client and therapist. Ethical and relationship issues.

    age: 18 and up.

  25. Talia says

    Thank you for giving these awesome opportunities every month!

    My email is in the required field.
    My story’s genre: Sci-fi
    Intended audience: YA

  28. Annie Douglass Lima says

    YA action and adventure. Could be considered fantasy because it takes place in another world, but the world is very similar to our own (the main difference being that slavery is legal there).

    audience: preteens, teens, adults

    Thank you very much! I hope I get picked! 🙂

  30. Southpaw HR Sinclair says

    This is very kind of you to offer this so frequently.

    1. on account
    2. urban fantasy
    3. adult mainstream

  34. Cathy Nrockman says

    First Bite is m/f sweetness spicy urban fantacy with a touch of romance
    My market is for mid twenties up , men and women on budgets with hobbies that like some fun a little action,and a simple escape

  35. Laura Selinsky says

    Young Adult; Contemporary Fantasy; Your choice- the one with the *male protagonist or the one with the female protagonist.
    *Yeah, I know this one has more marketability because boys prefer male protagonists, but I love my girl Rose.

  36. CC Riley says

    Email address listed above.
    Women’s fiction with a hint of magic
    My intended audience would be mostly women from the new adult age to a little older.

  37. S. J. Dunn says

    Literary thriller (the goal, the dream? A la Gone Girl !)

    Working title: A MILLION CLOSED EYES

    sjdunncuba at yahoo dot com

    audience: mainstream and thriller audiences

    I’m using an unusual technique so would love feedback on my first page. (no murders, no villains, no swear words, no sex, no prologue … First Person POV the main character… 1st chapter is the Inciting Incident, but not the Call to Action.)

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