Critiques 4 U


Happy November, everyone! As a recent transplant from Florida to New York, I am TOTALLY LOVING THE FALL—which, you know, never actually happens in Florida. It just shifts from ridiculously hot to uncomfortably warm. But here…The leaves changed color, my kids raked them up and jumped into piles, and for the first time ever, we didn’t sweat on Halloween. And now that our house is done and we’ve moved in, I can enjoy this wonderful view while critiquing your first pages!


But don’t worry. I won’t get distracted, because while I adore fall, I also love our monthly Critiques 4 U contest. So…if you’re working on a first page and would like some objective feedback, please leave a comment that includes: 

1) your email address. Some of you have expressed concern about making your email address public; if you’re sure that the email address associated with your WordPress account is correct, you don’t have to include it here. But if you do win and I’m unable to contact you through that email address, I’ll have to choose an alternate winner.

2) your story’s genre (no erotica, please)


Three commenters’ names will be randomly drawn and posted tomorrow. If you win, you can email me your first page and I’ll offer my feedback. Best of luck!


Becca Puglisi is an international speaker, writing coach, and bestselling author of The Emotion Thesaurus and its sequels. Her books are available in five languages, are sourced by US universities, and are used by novelists, screenwriters, editors, and psychologists around the world. She is passionate about learning and sharing her knowledge with others through her Writers Helping Writers blog and via One Stop For Writers—a powerhouse online library created to help writers elevate their storytelling. You can find Becca online at both of these spots, as well as on Facebook and Twitter.
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45 Responses to Critiques 4 U

  1. And the winners are…

    Chris Sarantopoulos
    Gifford MacShane

    Thanks for entering, everyone. I’ll see you next month!

  2. Gargi says:

    Email: mehra.gargi at
    Genre: Contemporary YA

  3. Andrew says:

    ooklah at
    science fiction

    Thanks for a random opportunity.

  4. YA drama
    🙂 Thanks for this contest!

  5. Silvia says:

    park_silvia at hotmail
    YA Fantasy

    I adore autumn, especially in NY 🙂

  6. Janell Coberly says:

    Hello, and thank you for the opportunity.

    genre: contemporary romance

  7. FCS says:

    Thanks for this opportunity! 🙂
    1) Email address: eisen5585 at yahoo dot com
    2) Story’s genre: science fiction

  8. Cindy says:

    Literary short fiction (2,500 words)…
    cindear at hotmail dot com

    I’m keeping my fingers crossed.

    Thank you, Becca!

  9. Working on my second (as yet ) unpublished novel. Women’s literary fiction genre.

    Fingers crossed.

  10. melanie redler says:

    Grrr…for some reason my three posting attempts have failed! I’m not sure what’s wrong, but I’m trying again–maybe this misty, soft rain will send it through.
    Young Adult Fiction (contemporary)

    Love this site!!

  11. Inger says:

    Thanks for the opportunity :0)

    1. inger at creatingthestory dot com
    2. Middle Grade Fantasy


  12. Fer Wicker says:

    Email: fer dot wicker at gmail dot com
    Genre: literary fiction

    I am working on my novel based on the life of my great aunt and the letters she left behind. It is set in the mid fifties in Argentina.

    Crossing my fingers!

  13. Carleen M. Tjader says:

    This is a great opportunity. Thanks!
    Picture Book ages 4-8

  14. If you think fall is great, just wait for your first White Christmas!

    Genre: Historical Romance

    WP email is correct!

    Thanks for the opportunity!


    Historical fiction with a past/present theme

  16. Alicia Dugas says:

    Genre: New Adult Romance

    adugas65 [at] Gmail [dot] com
    A safe way to include your email address in a comment section is like I have above.

  17. Joy Spicer says:

    What a gorgeous view! Autumn is my favourite season, because of the colours. Glad you’re enjoying it.

    I, too, would love a critique – fingers crossed.
    Email is
    YA fantasy


  18. Aiar says:

    1) aiar shai at gmail dot com

    2) fantasy / science fiction

  19. Sylvia Ike says:


    2. New Adult Thriller

  20. You guys are so cool! I’ll throw my beanie into the Critiques 4 U.

    alvaradofrazier at gmail dot com
    New Adult

  21. Roxanne Lambie says:
    YA Sci-if/Romance

  22. Mart Ramirez says:

    Super congrats again on the move, Becca!! Beautiful view!! Love fall and the change in color. Good to know about Florida 🙂 Maybe this will be a first white Christmas this year? XO

  23. Abigail says:

    I’d love to have my first page critiqued. My email is included in this comment, and I have contacted you before. My genre is Fantasy/Adventure.

  24. Karla Valenti says:

    I would love the opportunity to receive a critique on my middle grade novel.

    mxcnamama [at] gmail [dot] come

    Thank you!

  25. I would like to have my first page critiqued. Thank you.

    Women’s Fiction

  26. Linda Strawn says:

    I would love a critique of my first chapter. My email is lindastrawn (at) yahoo (dot) com and my book is an inspirational romance.

  27. Tracy Lucas says:

    Post apocalyptic thriller

    My fingers are crossed.

  28. Literary historical fiction

  29. mythos_20 at yahoo dot com

    post-apocalyptic horror

    Thank you for the opportunity 🙂

  30. Cathy Brockman says:

    I am glad you like your new home. Fall is awesome. I think I would like to have the first page of Dark Magic looked at it has been edited and the story is in final stages it is sweet paranormal romance with humor.
    my email address is correct in wordpress.

  31. Talia says:

    Genre-Sci fi/fantasy

  32. I would much appreciate an objective critique. My email is and my genre is steampunk or gaslight fantasy.

  33. Lori Widdison says:

    Okay. Let’s try this again. First comment didn’t follow the rules. Bad comment. Genre: contemporary romance. Lolawid at gmail dot com

  34. Lori Widdison says:

    I would love to have you take a look at my first page!!

  35. Becca, congratulations on your move in and your chance to see fall in NY. May you have many more happy season changes. I’d love to send a first page to you. I’m so appreciative of the last one you critiqued. Why not try for another? 😉

  36. Isabelle says:

    Supernatural YA

  37. S. J. Dunn says:

    sjdunncuba at yahoo dot com

    Literary thriller (or so I’ve been told, but I forever strive to improve.

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