Critiques 4 U!

Hi, everyone! Can you believe it’s June? I’m SO looking forward to turning off my alarm clock for two months and soaking up the sun. But there are still 3 weeks of school (for us) to get through in the meantime, so let’s do some critiques, shall we?


If you’re working on a first page and would like some objective feedback, please leave a comment that includes: 

1) your email address. Some of you have expressed concern about making your email address public; if you’re sure that the email address associated with your WordPress account is correct, you don’t have to include it here. But if you do win and I’m unable to contact you through that email address, I’ll have to choose an alternate winner.

2) your story’s genre (no erotica, please)

Also, please be sure your first page is ready to go so I can critique it before next month’s contest rolls around. If it needs some work and you won’t be able to get it to me right away, I’d like to ask that you plan on entering the next contest, once any necessary tweaking has been taken care of. 🙂


Three commenters’ names will be randomly drawn and posted tomorrow. If you win, you can email me your first page and I’ll offer my feedback. Best of luck!


Becca Puglisi is an international speaker, writing coach, and bestselling author of The Emotion Thesaurus and its sequels. Her books are available in five languages, are sourced by US universities, and are used by novelists, screenwriters, editors, and psychologists around the world. She is passionate about learning and sharing her knowledge with others through her Writers Helping Writers blog and via One Stop For Writers—a powerhouse online library created to help writers elevate their storytelling. You can find Becca online at both of these spots, as well as on Facebook and Twitter.
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32 Responses to Critiques 4 U!

  1. Ok, the winners for this month are BJ Myrick, Natalie Shannon, and Sherryl Clark. I’ve sent you each an email; if you don’t see it soon, please check your spam folder or contact me at within the next 48 hours.

    Thanks so much for entering, everyone. Enjoy the warm weather, and best of luck with your writing. I’ll see you next month!

  2. Dylan says:

    I don’t see my comment. So I will write another.

    1. jones. dylan19 no spaces.

    2. YA Urban Fantasy.

  3. Gargi says:

    Would love a critique. My genre is YA contemporary.
    Email: mehra DOT gargi at gmail DOT com

  4. Jay Hicks says:

    What a fabulous idea. I live in relative isolation, so most of my learning/sharing opportunities come online. So thanks for this opportunity.

  5. Middle grade fantasy.
    Thanks for the opportunity – fingers crossed!

  6. Janis Robinson says:

    I hear you lose 100 percent of the shots you don’t take, so I’m going for it.
    Women’s upmarket fiction.

  7. Alicia says:

    email: adugas [at]
    Genre: romance

  8. women’s historical fiction series

  9. Natalie Shannon says:

    genre: paranormal/vampire/urban fanatsy

    • Natalie Shannon says:

      or you could use the email associated with my word press or both. I put the gmail one because I don’t mind the public seeing it. It is my secondary email.

  10. Love to have a first page critique.
    genre: Mystery (police procedural type)
    Title “Monster in the Closet”
    My website is ‘under construction’ and being switched to WordPress so my email is my best contact currently.

  11. Diana McDowell says:

    Genre: Women’s Fiction

  12. Rine says:

    Oh, so nerve-racking, but here goes…

    YA Fantasy

    • Rine says:

      Also, random question, but when you say “first page,” about how many words do you mean? I just wonder about this, because first page lengths can be different depending on spacing, font, etc. Thank you!

      • Hi, Rine. A first page is typically double spaced with size 12 font. When I contact the winners I let them know the best way to determine their first page, so you’ll be all set :).

  13. Time travel romance. Thanks for the opportunity.

  14. Emily Cushing says:

    This sounds great, thanks. My email is emcush(at)hotmail(dot)com. Genre is middle grade mystery.

  15. Kimberly B. says:

    Would love a first page critique! My novel is YA Fantasy and my email is beax0002 (at) umn (dot) edu. Thanks for the opportunity!

  16. Donna Maloy says:

    My genre is Regency Historical, subgenre Suspense

  17. Bonnie says:

    The link to an email friend did not come up, Reddit is impossible to join, and google + kept rejecting my information that always worked before so I give up. I’ve spent a ton of time trying to follow the instructions. Done!

    • HI Bonnie, those are just our share buttons for sharing this post, not used to enter. Just so you are aware, most just put their email in the comment itself with spaces added, or in the case of this comment, because you are already signed in, your email address is visible to us (not to everyone).

      Best, Angela

  18. Talia says:

    Email – included 🙂

    Genre – YA Epic Fantasy

  19. B. J. Myrick says:

    I just started a new story. Can I join in?

  20. Jackie Layton says:

    I’d love a first page critique. Thanks! Inspirational romance.


    Thanks again.

  21. Mary Kate says:

    My email address is associated with my WordPress account. And I write YA contemporary. Yay, thank you so much!

  22. Erin says:

    Why not give it a shot? Genre is romance.

  23. Frances Rove says:

    Would love a first-page critique!

  24. Carol Baldwin says:

    Lower YA Historical fiction. Since I’m starting over, I may as well get your eyes on my new first page (a WIP itself.) Thanks.

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