Critiques 4 U!

Hello, lovely writer friends! How’s your summer going? My family’s working our way through our summer bucket list, which so far includes getting ice cream, picking berries, making pie, and going to the water park. We’re also getting ready to fly out of town to visit Nana and Granddaddy, which equates to children happily watching movies at 30,000 feet and uninterrupted reading time for me. That means I need some material :).


If you’re working on a first page and would like some objective feedback, please leave a comment that includes: 

1) your email address. Some of you have expressed concern about making your email address public; if you’re sure that the email address associated with your WordPress account is correct, you don’t have to include it here. But if you do win and I’m unable to contact you through that email address, I’ll have to choose an alternate winner.

2) your story’s genre (no erotica, please)

Also, please be sure your first page is ready to go so I can critique it before next month’s contest rolls around. If it needs some work and you won’t be able to get it to me right away, I’d like to ask that you plan on entering the next contest, once any necessary tweaking has been taken care of. 🙂


Three commenters’ names will be randomly drawn and posted tomorrow. If you win, you can email me your first page and I’ll offer my feedback. Best of luck!


Becca Puglisi is an international speaker, writing coach, and bestselling author of The Emotion Thesaurus and its sequels. Her books are available in five languages, are sourced by US universities, and are used by novelists, screenwriters, editors, and psychologists around the world. She is passionate about learning and sharing her knowledge with others through her Writers Helping Writers blog and via One Stop For Writers—a powerhouse online library created to help writers elevate their storytelling. You can find Becca online at both of these spots, as well as on Facebook and Twitter.
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39 Responses to Critiques 4 U!

  1. And the winners are…

    Temple Wang, Dylan, and Tricia Saxby. Congrats! I’ll be in touch shortly.

    And thanks everyone for entering. See you again next month :).

  2. Gargi says:

    Thanks for the opportunity, Becca!

    Email: Mehra DOT gargi at gmail DOT com
    Genre: YA Contemporary

  3. David Pelletier says:

    Genre: murder mystery

  4. Lynn says:

    Historical Fiction/romance

  5. De Wayne W. Perry says:
    Literary Fiction

    Thank you for your generous offer! Enjoy your vacation.

  6. John Helmon says:

    Literary fiction

  7. Tricia Saxby says:

    Contemporary reunion romance

  8. J. Amirah says:

    Thanks for this critique lottery!

    YA – Realistic Fiction

  9. L Rita St. Clair says:

    Time Travel Romance

  10. Patrick Witz says:

    Patrick Witz
    Speculative Fiction

    As Donkey from the Shrek Movie shouts jumping up from behind the crowd, “Oh, pick me, pick me, oh pick me!”

    Genre: psychological suspense

    Have a great vacation and happy reading!

  12. Jackie Layton says:

    Romantic Suspense

    Thanks, Becca!

  13. Alicia Dugas says:

    Genre: New Adult romance
    adugas65 [at] gmail [dot] com

  14. Laurie Wood says:

    Hi Becca,
    Romantic suspense

  15. Talia says:

    Thanks for doing critiques every month, Becca!!
    Email – included
    Genre – YA Epic Fantasy

  16. Sally Shupe says:

    Happy uninterrupted reading time for you! Thank you for offering a critique!

    psychological suspense

  17. What an amazing opportunity – thank you so much Becca!

    Genre: Historical fiction (1950s Cyprus)


  18. Romana Iorga says:

    Thanks so much for the opportunity!

    Romantic suspense

  19. Rebecca Sims says:
    Murder Mystery

  20. Rhay says:

    YA contemporary

    Thanks for the opportunity

  21. Yes pls!

    YA contemporary fantasy

  22. Hi Becca!

    I love your work!

    A memoir, which begins with my earliest childhood memories; before my parents first divorce and before the fire, which resulted in my mother becoming an alcoholic.

    Thank you so much for this opportunity!
    I hope your holiday is pleasantly refreshing!


    I have a WordPress blog but life got in the way so I haven’t updated it for a while. I no longer live in Los Angeles. I now reside, (nearer to you I believe), in Los Vegas. However, my blog does include thoughts, from my heart, on my childhood abuse; from the view of a healing adult child of an alcoholic.

    • Thanks for the kind words, Elizabeth. I actually live in New York, so while Las Vegas is closer, it’s not too much closer ;).

      • I apologize for thinking you lived in Las Vegas. I had it in my head after I experienced something strange with the Google maps application. I had just arrived in this seedy town, and was using maps to assist me, when Writers Helping Writers poped up on the map near to my location. It had a peculiar message attached to it… The message read that only I was able to view this!
        I realized later that, because I had visited your website, Google placed Writers Helping Writers as a “business I knew” into my maps application. That’s why it had the uncanny message that only I could see it.
        I must admit that, at the time, it was rather disconcerting, yet decidedly comforting, to be so mysteriously connected with other fellow writers. 🙂
        I no longer have that cell phone, so I’m not sure if Writers Helping Writers will still come up in my maps application to guide and comfort me.

      • Elizabeth Polucha says:

        I apologize for writing too much. It’s what we do. ?????

  23. Emily Cushing says:

    Thanks for the chance.

    emcush (at) hotmail (dot) com

    Middle grade mystery

  24. Jen says:

    Adult Contemporary Romance

    Thank you!!

  25. Mary Nelligan says:

    Adult Historical Fiction

    Thank you!

  26. H S Rivney says:

    What a kind offer! Look forward to winning a critique.
    Science Fiction

  27. Christina Pishiris says:

    Women’s commercial

    c_pishiris at hotmail dot com

    Thanks for the opportunity!

  28. MG Contemporary

    Thanks, Becca. Your insights are always appreciated!


  29. Adult historical fiction
    Thank you for this offer and for your helpful books.

  30. Kristen Howe says:

    Adult political thriller

  31. Carol Baldwin says:

    YA, Historical fiction

    Thanks for offering and have a great vacation!

  32. Temple Wang says:

    Literary Fiction

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