Physical description of a character can be difficult to convey—too much will slow the pace or feel ‘list-like’, while too little will not allow readers to form a clear mental image. If a reader cannot imagine what your character looks like, they may have trouble connecting with them on a personal level, or caring about their plight.
One way to balance the showing and telling of physical description is to showcase a few details that really help ‘tell the story’ about who your character is and what they’ve been through up to this point. Think about what makes them different and interesting. Can a unique feature, clothing choice or way they carry themselves help to hint at their personality? Also, consider how they move their body. Using movement will naturally show a character’s physical characteristics, keep the pace flowing and help to convey their emotions.
Descriptors: shapely, curvy, scrawny, thin, plump, muscular, sinewy, athletic, long, stumpy, stubbly, hairy, sleek, tanned…
Things Legs Do (and other words/phrases to describe those actions)
- Move: run, walk, jog, stride, sprint, pump, piston, leap, jump, dash, dart, lope, trot, pummel
- Dance: boogie, cavort, careen, hop, jive, frolic, prance, caper, jitter
Key Emotions and Related Leg Gestures:
- Nervousness: tingle, tremble, shiver, quiver, shake, shift, cross/uncross, pace
- Terror…
Clichés to Avoid: legs like tree trunks, toothpicks, or chicken legs
HINT: When describing any part of the body, try to use cues that show the reader more than just a physical description. Make your descriptions do double duty. Example: Jenna’s legs were all muscle, pushing and pulling and working with no sign of fatigue. Right now, she was just running a treadmill; if she ever had to escape a psychotic lunatic, my money was on Jenna.
BONUS TIP: The Color, Texture, and Shape Thesaurus might help you find a fresh take on some of the descriptors listed above!
Describe your character’s features in a way that reveals more than just a physical description. Show what he looks like while also reinforcing his personality and emotional state, thereby doing more with less.
Need concrete examples of how to describe your character in a compelling, magnetic way? Good news! This thesaurus has been integrated into our online library at One Stop For Writers. There, you can find help with metaphors and similes, as well as the best ways to describe your character using movement. The entire Physical Feature collection is cross-referenced and linked for easy navigation. If you’re interested in seeing a free sampling of the updated Physical Feature Thesaurus and our other descriptive collections, head on over and register at One Stop!
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Betsey Riedl says
Do you suppose it’s alright for a character to say she has chicken legs if she’s poking fun at herself?
ANGELA ACKERMAN says
Absolutely – if something is part of a character’s viewpoint pr upbringing or ways of comparing, it makes sense they would say that or think that.
Becca Puglisi says
Surya, chins are coming soon :).
Marcia, toothpick legs are a GREAT addition. Forgot about that one.
And Leslie, I agree, lol. I checked it out carefully before I posted it to make sure it was appropriate. Then I felt a little pervy…
So glad you’re all enjoying the new series 🙂
Leslie S. Rose says
Uh oh, the guy in the picture better not move those legs if his shorts are too baggy. We might get to know him better.
Surya Vaidyanathan says
Brilliant posts! They’re all ever so useful. I’m personally waiting to read one about chins. 😛
Tracy Campbell says
Hi Becca,
I can’t get enough of these posts. Great job! 🙂
Tracy
Marcia says
Yes, we hear chicken legs a lot, don’t we? And also toothpick, mostly in connection with thighs. Maybe because so many people want them. 😀
Martha Ramirez says
Very nice! I hope you guys come out with another book with entries like this too 🙂
Marissa says
THANK YOU. I’m working on cutting out all my crutch phrases right now, and these entries are my new best friend.
Southpaw says
Oooo, very nice.
Traci Kenworth says
Great one!!