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Weather Thesaurus Entry: Avalanche

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WEATHER is an important element in any setting, providing sensory texture and contributing to the mood the writer wishes to create in a scene. With a deft touch, weather can enhance the character’s emotional response to a specific location, it can add conflict, and it can also (lightly) foreshadow coming events.

However, caution must accompany this entry: the weather should not be used as a window into a character’s soul. The weather can add invisible pressure for the character, it can layer the SCENE with symbolism, it can carefully hint at the internal landscape, but it must never OVERTLY TELL emotion. Such a heavy-handed approach results in weather cliches and melodrama (a storm raging above a bloody battle, a broken-hearted girl crying in the rain).

SENSORY DESCRIPTORS:

Sight: Avalanches occur in mountainous terrain where a natural pockets of snowpack build up, made from either fresh snow or layers of older, compacted snow.  Often a shift in temperature (thaw), rainfall or windstorm can trigger an avalanche. If too much snow accumulates too quickly, or rain compacts fresh snow creating an unstable heavy slab, an avalanche is an event waiting to happen…

Smell: The tang of ozone would be the most noticeable, along with pine or spruce needles…

Taste:Cold, metallic snow, ice crystals…

Touch: Chunks of snow pummeling the body, branches whipping against the face, clawing for handholds, the drag of snow pulling you under, arms and fist slamming into the snow in an attempt to stay at the surface, the squeeze of snow debris against the body…

Sound: The precursor sound to an avalanche is a whomp noise.  This is the sound of instability in the ice pack and if close enough a person would hear the crack as a layer of snowpack breaks. If an avalanche is in motion, trees crack and snap on the way down, there is a hiss as fresh slow…

EMOTIONAL TRIGGERS:

Mood: Avalanches can infuse a sense of terror into a scene. Wild, uncontrolled and deadly, those who witness one, live through one or by chance alone, narrowly miss being caught in one are brought face to face with their own mortality. A somberness follows in its wake as horror sets in: being caught in such a force would most likely…

Symbolism: A lack of control, volatility, an unstable lifestyle…

Don’t be afraid to use the weather to add contrast. Unusual pairings, especially when drawing attention to the Character’s emotions, is a powerful trigger for tension. Consider how the bleak mood of a character is even more noticeable as morning sunlight dances across the crystals of fresh snow on the walk to work. Or how the feeling of betrayal is so much more poignant on a hot summer day. Likewise, success or joy can be hampered by a cutting wind or drizzling sleet, foreshadowing conflict to come. 

Weather is a powerful tool, helping to foreshadow events and steer the emotional mood of any scene.

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  1. Jeanne says

    So is there any truth to the old wisdom of raising your arm directly overhead before the avalanche comes – it’s supposed to make it easier for search crews to find you because they’ see your blue, frozen fingers above the snow. But if the force of the avalanche pushes you ass over teakettle, where did that kind of advice come from?

  7. Christina Farley says

    Eek! I hope I don’t have to write a scene where my characters have to be buried alive. Please don’t give them any ideas. I’ve got enough bad things going on as it is.

    But fantastic post as always.

  9. Angela Brown says

    You were right. That video was not for the faint of heart. But it would provide someone incorporating avalanche with a first hand account of the experience of being buried alive; the immediate terror, rapid breathing, the noises made by clothing while buried alive. Very intense scenes can be designed.

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