Physical Feature Entry: Athletic Build

Physical description of a character can be difficult to convey—too much will slow the pace or feel ‘list-like’, while too little will not allow readers to form a clear mental image. If a reader cannot imagine what your character looks like, they may have trouble connecting with them on a personal level, or caring about their plight. 

One way to balance the showing and telling of physical description is to showcase a few details that really help ‘tell the story’ about who your character is and what they’ve been through up to this point. Think about what makes them different and interesting. Can a unique feature, clothing choice or way they carry themselves help to hint at their personality? Also, consider how they move their body. Using movement will naturally show a character’s physical characteristics, keep the pace flowing and help to convey their emotions.

Descriptors: Broad shoulders and back, narrow waist, flat stomach, toned and enlarged muscles, lean frame…

People Likely to have an Athletic Build: professional and amateur athletes, health-conscious individuals…

Famous Examples:

• Bruce Lee
• Channing Tatum
• Usain Bolt…

Simile and Metaphor Help:

Twists on the Stereotypical Athletic Build:

• Athletic builds are almost always tanned, dark-skinned, or some other enviable shade. How about an athletic body that’s a little less desirable, like pale, veined, acned, or sickly…

HINT: When describing any part of the body, try to use cues that show the reader more than just a physical description. Make your descriptions do double duty. Example: The treadmill beeped and Jess slid off, trying not to fall over. The workout had been a killer, and then the run on top of that…She wiped her face and caught a glimpse of herself in the mirror. Her muscles stood out, nearly pulsing after what she’d put them through. And by the looks of it, she’d managed to work off that cookie from yesterday. But volleyball tryouts were tomorrow, and she wasn’t the only one vying for a starting spot. She tossed the towel over her shoulder and headed for the pull-up bar.

Describe your character’s features in a way that reveals more than just a physical description. Show what he looks like while also reinforcing his personality and emotional state, thereby doing more with less.

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