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Weather Thesaurus Entry: Mist or Fog

April 27, 2011 by BECCA PUGLISI

WEATHER is an important element in any setting, providing sensory texture and contributing to the mood the writer wishes to create in a scene. With a deft touch, weather can enhance the character’s emotional response to a specific location, it can add conflict, and it can also (lightly) foreshadow coming events.

However, caution must accompany this entry: the weather should not be used as a window into a character’s soul. The weather can add invisible pressure for the character, it can layer the SCENE with symbolism, it can carefully hint at the internal landscape, but it must never OVERTLY TELL emotion. Such a heavy-handed approach results in weather cliches and melodrama (a storm raging above a bloody battle, a broken-hearted girl crying in the rain).

SENSORY DESCRIPTORS:

Sight: Hazy whiteness & curls of smoky air currents that obscure surroundings and make distances difficult to fathom. Fog is denser than mist, and visibility is reduced…

Smell: Damp, picks up the scent of brine and algae near water sources, earthy scents (soil, pine, greenery) in natural areas and urban scents in cities…

Taste: No taste, but breath would be moist in nature. It may carry a briny tang if near a water source.

Sound: No sound in itself, but in natural environments, animals would be less likely to make movement/noise for fear of predators they could not see, causing an ‘unnatural quiet’. A lack of a breeze contributes to this, causing sound to not carry or seem muffled.

Touch: A cold, dewy sensation against the skin. With little to no air movement, the moist air will cling to hair and clothing, weighing both down and casing water droplets to form during prolonged…

EMOTIONAL TRIGGERS:

Mood: By nature, mist and fog obscures and hides. It causes an atmosphere of mystery and uncertainty, and if danger (real or perceived) is present, it can ratchet up fear. Characters rely on sight more so than anything else, so the visibility restrictions, combined with the unpleasant feeling of cold and damp…

Symbolism: Doom, danger, mystery, confusion…

Possible Cliches: Mist and fog used in dreams to imply repressed memory or knowledge…

Don’t be afraid to use the weather to add contrast. Unusual pairings, especially when drawing attention to the Character’s emotions, is a powerful trigger for conflict. Consider how the bleak mood of a character is even more noticeable as morning sunlight dances across the crystals of fresh snow on the walk to work. Or how the feeling of betrayal is so much more poignant on a hot summer day. Likewise, success or joy can be hampered by a cutting wind or drizzling sleet, foreshadowing conflict to come.

Weather is a powerful tool, helping to foreshadow events and steer the emotional mood of any scene.

Need more detail regarding this weather element? Good news! This thesaurus has been integrated into our new online library at One Stop For Writers. There, not only has the information in each entry been enhanced and expanded, we’ve also added scenarios for adding conflict and tension. The entire thesaurus is also cross-referenced with our many other descriptive collections for easy searchability. Registration is free, so if you’re interested in seeing a sampling of the fully updated Weather and Earthly Phenomenon Thesaurus, head on over to One Stop.

BECCA PUGLISI
BECCA PUGLISI

Becca Puglisi is an international speaker, writing coach, and bestselling author of The Emotion Thesaurus and its sequels. Her books are available in five languages, are sourced by US universities, and are used by novelists, screenwriters, editors, and psychologists around the world. She is passionate about learning and sharing her knowledge with others through her Writers Helping Writers blog and via One Stop For Writers—a powerhouse online library created to help writers elevate their storytelling.

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  1. Iris Zevlac says

    April 30, 2011 at 10:44 pm

    yay! This is exaclty what I needed right now!

  2. Laura Pauling says

    April 29, 2011 at 6:05 pm

    I love me some creepy fog in a book! Even if it’s a bit too direct. 🙂 Awesome, guys!

  3. tracikenworth says

    April 29, 2011 at 7:21 am

    I love these settings. It reminds me of Stephen King’s “The Mist,” or the fog movies. Right up my storylines…

  4. Karen Lange says

    April 28, 2011 at 8:57 pm

    This is timely, thanks! It also reflects some of our local weather lately. 😛
    Happy weekend,
    Karen

  5. Stina Lindenblatt says

    April 28, 2011 at 8:37 am

    Awesome job as always. We frequently get early morning fog from the Bow river since it’s not far from my house. It no longer has that cliched eerie feeling. 😉

  6. Becca Puglisi says

    April 28, 2011 at 8:10 am

    I’m loving this thesaurus. Nicely done, Angela.

  7. Jettica says

    April 28, 2011 at 6:54 am

    A wonderful post. Very in depth and useful.

    With mist and fog there is the opportunity to be very cliched. But when used properly it can bring about an amazing atmosphere.

  8. Rachna Chhabria says

    April 28, 2011 at 5:55 am

    You guys are awesome. Loved the post. I seldom add the weather, just a mention of a drizzle or cold winds or a sunny day. Your post is tempting me to go more into weather details.

  9. Trisha says

    April 27, 2011 at 10:56 pm

    I love cold weather, rain, etc. So I am a big mist/fog fan 🙂

  10. Jeff King says

    April 27, 2011 at 9:04 pm

    Once again I see what my settings are lacking… a good snow storm, or the gloom of the fog, or the chill of an autumn breeze.

    Nice work.

  11. EEV says

    April 27, 2011 at 3:43 pm

    This entry was very timely! I’ll be using it soon, thanks!

    P.S. If a book of mine ever see the light of the day, look for acknowledges there 🙂

    – EEV

  12. Bish Denham says

    April 27, 2011 at 12:42 pm

    We actually had a little fog yesterday morning, a nice momentary respite from the dry.

  13. L.J. Boldyrev says

    April 27, 2011 at 12:02 pm

    Such an excellent post! Thanks, girls!

  14. Julie Musil says

    April 27, 2011 at 11:55 am

    Girls, I must tell you…I’ve been revising these past few weeks, and when I needed to show emotion a different way, I came here. Truly, you guys are amazing. Thanks for all these amazing posts.

  15. Jenna says

    April 27, 2011 at 10:52 am

    So many people think weather is a cheap way to set a scene. If it’s used correctly, it works pretty stinkin’ well, though. Awesome post.

    And speaking of weather, I wish it would stop raining…*Glares at sky.*

  16. April says

    April 27, 2011 at 10:25 am

    As always, this is a great post. I could spend all day on your blog and still have so much to learn. I’ve never really thought about weather beyond…setting. Foreshadowing and the actual physicality of it…I can recognize it when I read other’s writing, but I don’t think about putting it into my own so much.

    I’m going to have to change that outlook.

  17. Angela Ackerman says

    April 27, 2011 at 9:53 am

    Thanks guys! Whoops, guess I slotted this a day early in one of my pre-cofffee fogs, so I guess that’s appropriate, considering the topic! LOL

  18. Matthew MacNish says

    April 27, 2011 at 9:43 am

    I absolutely love what fog does to sound. The way you can hear a whisper from a hundred yards away as if it were right next to you, and then the next moment you can’t hear your own breath.

  19. Anne E. Johnson says

    April 27, 2011 at 8:58 am

    Thanks for this post. You make an important point. I’d call what you’re describing “physical atmosphere,” and it does make a huge difference to acknowledge it in a scene. I find that, besides the foreshadowing you mention, a particular atmosphere can be a great motivator for a character’s behavior. Who isn’t a bit grouchier when it’s hot and humid?
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